It hasn't been easy. Dear GOD it hasn't been easy. There were so many great entries that offered up so many great ideas and moods. I narrowed it down to ten, then added five more, then did the whole process again, and again...
Then I started writing the story itself, writing from the middle on, and once I got the feel of the story I went back over the entries, searching for a line that fit with what I was writing. And that's how I found it.
There can, of course, be only one winner. But so many of you came close. I'm going to include just a handful of these entries, just to give you an idea of the broad range I was getting. First of all, there where the funny entries, entries like Kallista's:
Tanith Low found herself running for all she was worth from a crazy pack of sugar-filled screaming, drooling zombie toddlers.
Or Zoodude254's:
It was a dark and stormy night... actually it was a perfectly bright Tuesday morning, but being chased down the street by a giant squid makes it feel like a dark and stormy night; squid spittle feels a lot like rain, and it blocks most of the sunlight as it's running towards you.
The BookNommer's:
Tanith was scared: not in the look-behind-you-feels-like-someone-is-watching-you-but-no one-is kind of way, but in the OHMIGOD-OHMIDGOD-I-AM-SO-SCARED-I-AM-GOING-TO-PEE-MY-PANTS-THEN-DIE kind of way.
Jaid's entry was a wonderful lesson in the surreal:
"I am going to kill you with this fork," said the man in the grey trenchcoat, standing before Tanith, holding a spoon.
And of course, there was Ann-Marie:
The man rounded the corner at a dead run and was immediately trampled by a herd of goats.
(Um, all of Ann-Marie's entries were about goats. I worry about her.)
Then there were the atmospheric entries, one of the best of which was Saoirse's:
The crescent moon rested its tired frame upon the peak of the South Sister that jutted, stark white, into the dwindling twilit sky.
I was sorely tempted by this one. Not only is it well written, it's also set in Oregon, and I had a girlfriend who came from Portland... But no! It was beautiful, but it just didn't fit with the story I was writing.
Then there were the people who tried to sneakily undo the damage I had done to poor old Tanith at the end of Mortal Coil... JoelsCrazy tried it with:
The Remnant left Tanith's body.
And Dane Stull attempted to reverse the damage with:
Tanith felt terrible, her head felt like it weighed a thousand pounds, she hated lying to Val and Skulduggery about being fully possessed by the Remnant but she had bigger problems, here in the United States, the end of the world... again.
Very sneaky, but I spotted it just in time...!
As I said, many great entries, which only reinforces my belief that you're all insanely talented, and deeply disturbed, people. The less said about Lauren's attempt to put Valkyrie is a very revealing Wonder Woman outfit the better... Desmond would have a heart attack!
(Hmmmm... might put that Wonder Woman outfit into the next book...)
(No! No, I can't! Inappropriate for younger readers! You are a NAUGHTY girl, Lauren!)
I wish I could go through them all, but I simply can't. And so it gives me great pleasure to announce that the winner of the Ameriminion competition is THALIA, with:
Tanith wiped the blood off the carving knife and, ignoring the body of the man she had just stabbed to death, went back to carving her Jack-o-Lantern.
Simple, sinister, and there's already a corpse in the story. I like your style, Thalia. Now I have to go and finish the story.
Well done!
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Mm-mm.
Mm-mm is like, an answer . . . Er . . . Whatever. You're welcome lynxia.
Might be distant. Writing a What If?
*glares at the world in general and begins kicking tree angrily*
Das ist okay lynxia.
That's okay lynxia.
*grins triumphantly and climbs tree*
*sits on branch and swings legs*
Brb.
Back
No. I meant second that. I seconded Lynxia, not Nix.
Halten Sie mit dem Gott auf, Deutsch zu verdammen, oder ich werde Treten Ihres Arsches von hier zu Deutschland landen!
K Star.
The What If is done if anyone cares.
WB Nix!
For the love of god...stop speaking in a different language unless you WANT people not replying to you!
Oh, translation:
Stop with the God damn German or I'll end up kicking your ass from here to Germany!
All from my head, no translator needed.
I'll write something out Lynxia
OK.
#I was bangin 7 gram rocks, that's how I roll - winning
I have one gear: GO - epic winning
Are you bipolar?
I'm bi-winning
Win here, win there, win win everywhere#
You'd freak Zath? Never really thought of you as the 'freaking' type. Well... You learn something new every day, I guess.
Well, I would search, then freak on the inside. On the outside I'd sit down and drink something, occasionally leaping up to check for something again.
Fair enough. I think most people would do that, well... maybe not the drinking part. For me it would probably be torturing someone for the heck of it or committing other violent crimes and so on.
I'd smash things and yell and throw things around. I'd also fume quitly after a while
Bacl!
WB.
*is plotting*
The French are so strange...
But I love this video!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pIrvpn3k9A4&list=PL33B91AC6A49899D4&feature=plcp
AHA! *has formed plan*
*is grinning happily*
Back! My comment didn't post...
Commented on your What If post, Lindsey.
My name isn't Lindsey!
Hello.
Hi Cal!
Domt you read my comments? I told you'd be calling you Lindsey today. On this page.
Hi Calamity
It's so funny hopw they keep falling down
Yeah but my name isn't Lindsey so why?
Hi Cal
Hi, Cal!
Remi's lawyer must be God.
Ha. *grins*
Hi cal!
Gtg now bye may the fours be with you and a final HA!
Bye Star and I will have the last laugh!
HA!!
Bye Star!
Bye Star
Bye Star!
Bye, Ink.
I feel... Bored. Not normal bored though. Normal bored is like dullness this is.......... Empty. I will call it Hollow Boredom.
Wow, the French know how to party!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vsSokeGomnA&feature=autoplay&list=UUmPSwsooZq8an7xOLQQhAdw&playnext=1
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KT1pWo0WZJE&feature=channel&list=UL
This one is so funny
Bye.
Bye Zath.
Bye Mist.
<3 that one Nix.
Bye Mist
Everyone is sooo silent today. What's happened? Has someone come and killed you all?
I'm reading something...
Nah. Not quite.
#We won this battle with might and fearless hearts
We came and we fulfilled our prophecy
So now we shall march back towards our kingdom
With heads up high and glimmering eyes
we returned with our glory#
Bye Mist
I'm playing Minecraft for some reason...
It's so cold.
brb
K Nix.
back
WB.
I've just found this on Google and it kind of freaks me out...
Abraham Lincoln was elected to Congress in 1846.
John F. Kennedy was elected to Congress in 1946.
Abraham Lincoln was elected President in 1860.
John F. Kennedy was elected President in 1960.
Both were particularly concerned with civil rights.
Both wives lost their children while living in the White House.
Both Presidents were shot on a Friday.
Both Presidents were shot in the head.
Now it gets really weird.
Lincoln's secretary was named Kennedy.
Kennedy's Secretary was named Lincoln.
Both were assassinated by Southerners.
Both were succeeded by Southerners named Johnson.
Andrew Johnson, who succeeded Lincoln, Was born in 1808.
Lyndon Johnson, who succeeded Kennedy, was born in 1908.
John Wilkes Booth, who assassinated Lincoln, Was born in 1839.
Lee Harvey Oswald, who assassinated Kennedy, was born in 1939.
Both assassins were known by their three names.
Both names are composed of fifteen letters.
Now hang on to your seat.
Lincoln was shot at the theater named 'Ford.'
Kennedy was shot in a car called 'Lincoln' made by 'Ford.'
Lincoln was shot in a theater and his assassin ran and hid in a warehouse.
Kennedy was shot from a warehouse and his assassin ran and hid in a theater.
Booth and Oswald were both assassinated before their trials.
Rah! Rah! Like a dungeon dragon!
...wow...
Wow. That is creepy.
brb
I know! I was like 'No...' Then I Googled it all and it's all true! It's SO strange! AAGGRRHHH!!!
K Nix.
Woah, that's weird.
The dates are just... wow.
I wouldn't be surprised if they were assassinated in the same month.
Hang on, I'll Google it and if they were... *shivers*
NO. Lincoln was April and Kennedy was November.
Back!
*walks back in*
*grins at Nix*
We're going to Melbourne at the end of the year.
Oh, GOOD. *holds onto the difference*
THAT IS SO CREEPY!
*reads through the thing again*
I don't think I would've been able to fathom it if it were in the same month...
So I'm kind of glad.
... Melbourne?
I envy you soooooo much right now Zath you cannot begin to understand.
Who's we?
Gtg
Bye!
Mm...sorry, Lynxia. *is loving being envied*
My family.
Bye Eve
Bye Eve!
Bye, Eve!
*waves*
...That feels so alien to me...
Bye Eve!
...Git.
So... you and your family are comming to Melbourne
When exactly? And for how long?
And you have no idea how hard it is for me to to yell cause I'm finally meeting someone
I M H >) F -> A NOTHER FU MINS
and I'd come to England Lynxia, but it's so damn expensive...
(I am here for another-
Gtg again bye!
Lots of silence again...
*goes and pokes everyone to make sure they're still here*
*laughs*
Sorry. *means it too*
Christmas holidays. Don't have a precise date yet. Dunno for how long but it will be a holiday so for a while.
Mother: I'm planing our holiday.
Brother: Where are we going?
Mother: So I need to know when to take annual leave.
Brother: Where are we going?
Mother: I'm thinking end of the year holidays, okay?
Brother: Where are we going?
Me: Shut up, Ben.
Mother: Is anyone listening?
Brother: When are we going?
Me: Yeah, fine. End of the year.
Father: Where are we going?
Brother: Yes, where are we going?!
Me: We aren't going to Nepal.
Brother: So where ARE we going.
Me: Shut up.
Mother: I don't know.
Brother: ...What?
Mother: Well, at least we know WHEN we're going.
Father: There was this guy who ran from Sydney to Melbourne in five days...
Me: I want to go to Melbourne. *has just had lightbulb moment*
Mother: Me too.
Me: ...What, really?
So now we're going to Melbourne.
Bye Eve... again
Yeah, stupid air charges. Otherwise I'd come to Oz. But noooo. They have to charge tonnes of money for just one flight.
Lynxia, that one flight is from the top of the world to the bottom
We're almost polar oppisites...
Mist, your family is weird
Yup. I'm so far north that if the sun shows here it hides again because of the barren green waste land called England repulses it and you live south so that means you get sun and warmth and all that.
Mist, where exactly in Melbourne? City or Suburbs? I hate to say it proably won't be the western suburbs..
Nah. Just my brother. My father was just distracted. :P
Well, tonight it's going to be 4 degrees, so I'd say it's pretty cold here sometimes
I'll suggest the western suburbs, but I'll need some attractions, Nix.
Hang on. Even if he goes to the city, couldn't you still see him or is it ridiculously big like New York?
It;s -2C here and it;s meant to be getting warmer but it hasn't. And it's raining again.
*It's
Then the city
If I were you, i'd take the city. Western suburbs won't be there favourite place. But the bad thing is that my parents don't like my going to the city without them, it can be a rough place sometimes...
City is pretty big. But i will convince them to let me go, it's just that my mum might come as well
But i'll show you the good places to go
I have zilch experience with cities. I've been to London twice and it was hectic. I lived in the country side all my life.
Eureka Skydeck... uh... Old Melbourne goal... Dymocks... DOCkLANDS! There's a good place to go, the Docklands
I'm a city and country person. I used to spend the summers in the country
Nope. Always country. Only time I ever really go near a city is on the motorway.
I love the city during the day...
I love night skylines. They just look... No word for it really. Night skylines of anywhere look nice. Especially cities and the sea/ocean.
Hey, I just remembered I have to go the the city tomorrow
I get to go to school tomorrow. Yay.
Okay then. City.
Yeah, there's not much in the suburbs...
People always say they want to go to the country side but, honestly, there's not that much here.
I dunno why the country has appel, it just does. I suppose sometimes the city is just to crowded and busy.
Yuck school...
Which reminds me that I have to start wearing my winter uniform for school.
You have a winter uniform. We have to wear the same constantly.
You know the closest bookstore is Dymocks, in the city? That sucks...
Distant...
Yep. Consists of a kilt. Fun.
I'm sorry, but i can't get over this
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qvgVMecNp0c
Really? A kilt? Ouch,
The only difference we've ever had is when they changed the light blue shirts to white fitted ones. That was at the start of my Yr. 8.
I know!
They just take a while to put on. And then they need to constantly be fixed :3
So you don't have a summer at all?
Kind of but it's just rainy mainly.
We learnt the dance to this in PE Nix. It was so fun! We got to play the song and everything!
I learnt sefl defense in Pe
As if i couldn't defend myself already
Yeah, it was part of the Dance segment last term. We've done self defence before. I kicked everyone's ass.
the teacher was an idiot. Half the things wouldn't even work in a real fight
and you have to actually pick the subject dance to do stuff like that
Yeah. Loads of stuff like that happen in PE.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=endscreen&NR=1&v=XCMnNQW5fFs
I wish! We still have to!
I WAS going to ask to go to Adelaide, but...Mmm...
I'm going to go to Ireland when I'm old enough. Meeting Sparky and Cal is going to be easy. England for Lynxia...That's about it. I'd go to Adelaide somewhere along the way too, I think...
why is it the person who plays Hermione in these things never actually looks like her
I'm going to England. I have to
Yay! England isn't being overlooked for once. I'd come down to Oz. I want to move there when I'm older.
You know, it says his uncle died, but it was actually his godfather
This video should get its facts right
*sighs and sits by a tree*
*realizes something*
This...isn't actually depression...
I know. That's annoying.
I have to meet you all at some point! I have to! It would probably be easy to meet Flame and Crys. They live in Ireland. Star, L and Robin all live in England but I have to meet you all.
I have to meet you! Now!
There's this thing where you can go to England with school, but it's so expensive. I'm best of just going on my own
It's not even arguable.
I will meet you all.
I have to meet you at some point. Yeah, there's a trip down to New Zealand but it's this year and the deposit had to be in April last year.
Meeting you should be easy, Cal. You live in...Beecroft, right?
I can't meet anyone regularly cause no one's in Melbourne
Eastwood!
You?
Star lives near York. That's not that far from here.
Near Hornsby. hang on.
*looks up Eastwood*
I could catch a train to Hornsby easily.
Zath, dedicate already!!!
Oh, dedication. Right. Hang on, I'm bringing up a map...
Gah...I give up...
Dedications...right...
lol
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SNqX31FECik&feature=channel&list=UL
Baaaaack!
I dedicate this page to whoever invents teleportation devices that don't cost a fortune. :D
WB Eve.
Hi, Eve! *waves*
That still feels so weird...
seen it
Hello Eve!
Hi Eve
by it i mean the link to the HG parody
Brilliant ded! I want one!
Must have one...
I need one more. I'd come and see you! *hugs Nix* I'll have to go soon, but I'll come on at my nan's house.
*hugs back*
Okay
Hiiiiii!
Hi...
Have to go now! Will be back in 30 mins tops! *kisses Nix and shadow walks*
Bye Lynxia!
*kisses back*
Okay
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l64PffBtGGw&feature=related
Imma-going ta' Meeeelbooooourne!
Imma-going ta' Meeeelbooooourne!
*grins*
You are
Waving feels weird? *waves* Huh.
I'm a late commenter. Yes.
Bye Lynxia!
*starts to do a happy dance, then stops and frowns*
This had better work out, otherwise I'm going to look like I was lying again...
*glares at a tree*
...No. I'm sure it will work out. My mother seems pretty keen on going to Melbourne.
oh damn
I gotta go. I'll try and be back later. Hopefully soon
bbl
Yes, come back. Bye, Nix!
Bye Nix!
Anyone else here?
I'm here.
I'm here. Or maybe I'm invisible.
I can see you quite clearly!
Okay. Good. People. Although, I'm not sure if Eve is visible...
Anyway! *leaps onto iPod*
I'll be right back!
Really? Coz I can't. *slaps self*
Well, Mist, apparently I AM visible.
Back.
Back.
Yes...I think you are...
*looks at Eve*
Wait, no, I can see you.
Marvellous.
Hellooooooooooo?
Hello :)
Ah, good.
Hi Lynxia!
WB Lynxia!
Hi. I'm on my phone again so my comments will be disappearing.
Oh, god. My dad just forced me to eat a chocolate biscuit. *shudders*
I'll try to keep up.
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